My AC:FF FanFic, Brutality

[Shark]

Cool, it's nice to see this fic extend beyond that of just AC battles. It's getting more suspenseful with the inclusion of mystery notes and all.

And yet, somehow, the updates never fail to make me laugh. Like when she pulled a 9mm (hmm... didn't expect that) abd it was only the mailman, lol.

[Silence]

I get too bored without the humor in it all, I have the attention span of a friggen 3 year old lol.

Update SOON!!!

[Silence]

Update tomorrow!


I've said that a lot and updated how often?



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[Shark]

Hmm, interesting. I wonder if Raze will be involved...?

Oops, said too much about teh hidden spoilers!

[Silence]

Chapter 7: Murder-Death-Kill


Raze was amazed that she survived the night, with the horrors that came. She was driving to the plant when she went by a Quanti-King, the local burger joint. Being noon and that she slept extremely late, she went by. Knowing drive throughs ALWAYS mess up your order, she went inside, ordered a burger, some onion rings, and a drink to go, she was on her way out when she blacked out.


Waking up 20 minutes later in her car not sure how she got there, she looked around. Her head hurt real bad.

"God damn this hurts...."

Outside of her car, she saw her food spilled all over the sidewalk. She got out of her car to go inside to see if anybody saw what happened, when she realized it.

Everyone was dead, shot, and the bodies were all in a pile, lit on fire.

"Sandman....."

She quickly went back into he car and turned on the radio.

"In recent news, the long time raven, and mighty contender in the arena, Ace, has passed away, his loss makes many mourn as he was considered the pilot with the most untapped potential."

"What the f**k is going on...."

She drove off, not wanting to be a part of a police case with that many homicides. HEading to the assembly plant she pondered...

"If can't be sandman... He died.... But could it be..... no....... it can't..."

She got to the plant to find a note on the door

[Taking the day off after a great win]

"I knew they'd try to pull crap like this...."

Looking back at her car she wasn't sure where to go, home, or inside, as both were said to be the only safe places. She unlocked the door and headed inside, making sure she locked the door on the way in.

Getting o her computer she looked at Lyz, and just sat there staring.....

"Lyz won't be able to handle the regular league after the next match. Should I change now and win that way, or risk losing when I do change..."

She loaded the file she had set aside, code named: Bio.

She loaded the files, and glanced over it. There was no AI for it, but it was more than a solid design so she gave it to the assembly team, to keep Lyz, but create Bio.

She stood up, unsure if she wanted to leave, when she saw a figure running through the plant below. She pulled out her gun and started running.

She tripped on the last stair to the assembly area, where she could see the figure. The figure turned and threw something at her. It was a tiny bomb that blew her gun and left her defenseless.

The figure kept coming and went to kick her while she lay there stunned.

She moved and it missed, both stood, Raze not knowing what to expect, and the figure, knowing exactly what he wanted.

HE went to punch her face, she went under his punch, missing it completely, and punching him in the stomache. He keeled over a little and elbowed her in the spie as she screamed a little in pain. She rammed her knee into his groin, but sure enough he was protected, and a damn good cup it was. He came back around punching her in the base of the skull stunning her, as she started to black out, the last thing she remembered was a pain in her jaw.

The figure got what he wanted.


Raze woke up, not sure how long it had been, locked in a cell. She could see the figure outside watching her, not a guard guard, but more interested in her.... She saw another man, but couldn't make out who it was come by, and talk to the figure. They talked, exchanged something, and the figure left. The new man unlocked the door, opened it and instantly shot her with a taser, quickly stunning her.

"Do you understand what happens if you move?"

"Yes.." She was very weak from all the pain.

"Do you know who I am?"

"Sandman..."

"Very good, you remember me."

"I do, why are you here?!"

"Your daughter."

"What? I have no daughter!"

"Our daughter."

"What?"

"You don't remember it, 13 years ago?"

"I do, but you turned her into a monster, she is no daughter of mine."

She stared at him, just about in tears due to what was happening.

"I raised her well, she still loves watching your fights on TV, and even your current ones in the league."

"Your a monster"

"YOU OWE ME MY DEBT!!!"

"It was paid"

"YOU OWE ME MY DEBT!!!" He tased her.

"No....."

He pulled up a picture of a young girl, 12 years old, shiny blonde hair, in a little dress, a smile on her face and a bow in her hair.

"This is your daughter, she has never met you but she loves you know pay me my debt."

"I owe you nothing."

"You know damn well that you bought that from me and that it f**ked up your life and that I put you where you are today!"

"I owe you nothing..."

"Let it be"

He walked out, locking the door behind him, leaving her in her cell, no water, no food, no bathroom, just a cell.


Chapter 8: Long lost memories

[Silence]

Next update tomorrow

[Shark]

Oooh.... I can sense the drama sinking in.

This part was really interesting, added quite a bit of depth to the story. The whole hidden history with Sandman is intriguing, as I didn't expect Raze to have a daughter.

Of course, we hafta learn more about him and the daughter soon ;D.

And some humourous parts worth mentioning- quanti-king and the whole bit about the cup.

[O-G]

anyone here seen SuperTroopers when they test out the bullet proof cup?

[Silence]

Should I update?

[Purist]

Heck yes. You've got quite a story going, and I'm sure that I'm not the only one who enjoys reading it. Plus, you may revive this entire section by updating your fanfic. Overall, it'll be great to have an old and experienced member back and see him around, namely you, of course.

And man I still wanna see Roland and his AC in your fanfic (from that old and abandoned "contest" that I entered). Sigh... jk jk, forget my rant and please update.

[Shark]

Yes, update please if you have the chance.

Let's see Raze whip out another gun .

[ninja-cobalt]

Keep it going >< i was like, WOW this is awsome when i first read it, then BAM it stopped -_-

[Silence]

Lol I'll start working on it then, I didn't think this many people loved it.



And BTW with the contest, it didn't help that your design was the only one NOT in a fanfic lol.....

[Silence]

And since everyone is making the cup jokes (you know from super troopers)


I want a litre of coke


And that burger is for a cop - Does that look like spit?

[Silence]

Chapters 8: Long Lost Memories

Raze sat in the corner unsure of where she was or how she got there. She had no clue how long she had been in there. Then she saw Gaed walk by.


"GAED!"

"Raze? Why are you in the cell? And where were you yesterday?"

"Long story, can you just get me out?"

"Yeah let me get the key real fast."

Well that explained some, she was in a holding cell at the assembly plant and had been there a fairly short amount of time. She wanted to know more, about who the intruder was, why Sandman came back and most importantly, about her daughter. She paced a little pondering exactly what was going on until Gaed came back to open the cell.

"Everything OK?"

"Yeah I'm fine, did the assembly team get the plans for Bio?"

They started walking together towards Raze's office.

"I saw Bio, they've got the legs done, but are installing the core, this will take a little while. Looks like an awesome design, did you make it?"

"Yes, it's a design I used before I started blading, I want to enter it in the Z-league."

"Are you sure about that?"

"Yes why?"

"I've been reading, the Z-league isn't a league that we want to be in."

"Why's that?"

"You would have to pilot the AC."

Raze lit up with joy, overwhelmed by the thought of piloting again.

"You aren't allowed to pilot."

"Why the f**k not?"

"Because they fight to the death, Z-league slaughters ravens."

"I'll use a blade."

"It's been ye-"

"I DON'T GIVE A f**k!!!!"

Raze went into her office and shut the door. She moved her mouse to turn off her screen saver and started looking over Bio one last time.

"Laser cannon on left shoulder, orbits on right... machine gun from the good old days.... Doesn't have a bloody mag... left arm grenades...... looks all right, even have the right booster and legs...... Good ol' quads"

She can't start up the AI program for Bio yet and Lyz was still getting maintenance from the last fight.

She closed all the windows and closed her eyes. She was thinking about all to come, with the Z-league and the R-league. She didn't know what she wanted to do. She sat there in total silence just thinking about what was to come.

When she did finally open her eyes, she looked at the screen to see a picture of her daughter with a line of text scrolling around the background.


<You Owe Me My Money 100,000,000 credits You Know How To Contact Me>


Raze was petrified. She knew that Sandman would kill her daughter if she didn't pay. But she did have one problem.

Who was the father? Sandman? Her boyfriend at the time? Who?

She left the office and drove home. 9mm in hand she walked in and locked the door behind her. She checked her house and sat at her home computer. Just staring into space because the same thing was on this computer as the one was at work.

She stormed out of the house. She got into her car and started driving, where, she didn't know, but she did know she was being watched. She was Sandman's puppet.

She drove outside of town, to a deserted area, a desert in fact, and got out of her car and started pacing around.

"f**k HOW COULD THIS HAPPEN? HOW DID HE FIND ME, WHO IS MY DAUGHTER?"

Tears started streaming down her face.

"HOW THE f**k DO i GET OUT OF THIS crap? I HAVE NO f**kING CLUE WHAT TO DO.


WHY GOD WHY?!?!?!?!?!?!?!"

"Because you are not a pure person."

Sandman was walking towards her.

"You are not a pure person. Because of this you have 12 days."

"12 days until what?"

"She dies."

"My daughter?!"

"Yes."

"Fine I'll pay, just no more crap until my days are up."

"Ok. But you cannot enter the Z-league."

"Why?"

"Because that league is trouble, take my word. I may not have been the best - but this I know."

"Ok..."

She was nervous, Sandman was always belligerent, never passive. He started walking into the distance.

"But one last thing Sandman."

"Yes?"

"What is my daughters name?"

"Alexis."

He kept walking, and a gust rose up, a car drove up, and picked Sandman up and drove off.

She started towards the plant in her car, she had the 20,000,000credits from testing, now she just had to get the rest. She opened a laptop computer in her car, with the 20,000,000 from the match, she had 20,100,324credits.

"Damn I'm poor."

She picked up a cell phone.

~"This is Gaed."

"Gaed who's our next match in R-league?"

~"I don't know."

"Challenge them, I want to fight them ASAP."

~"Lemme me get on my computer and enter it. How many weeks prep do you want?"

"20 minutes."

~"Why the sudden -"

"Challenge them NOW."

She hung up driving back to town. Unsure of what was to come, and how she would get almost 80,000,000 credits.

[Shark]

Interesting, I wonder how she'll get the remaining credits... if she ever does.

Maybe she'll resort to crime .

[Silence]

I have it all plotted out, keep an eye out for the designs she fights...

[Purist]

She CAN go to the National Bank of Jacques...haha scratch that.

Good to hear that you've already sketched out the next chapter (or more). 20 minutes prep for a match...sounds like me procrastinating for a tourney. Anyway, great stuff; 'looking forward to the chapter 9.

[Silence]

Chapter 9: A monster in the making.


Raze ran in the door to the plant, out of breath and eager.

"Where is the match??"

"Tomorrow at 7:45 AM"

"Gaed we need to do it today!"

"We can't, the other team won't agree and you know league rules require at least one night for processing!"

"Fine! Enter Bio in the fight, is it finished yet?"

"Yes, all the but the AI. Which is your part."

Raze ran into her office and opened up the AI program for Bio. She opened up the one for Lyz.

"Control + C...... Control + V......"

Gaed walked in.

"Bio's done!"

"Raze are you short on cash or something, cause I can loan you money...."

"Short..... on..... Cash......?"

"I've never seen you like this, is it just cause you need money?"

"Well........"

"Out with it..."

"Yea......"

"How much?"

"80 -"

"Pfft I have 80 credits in my wallet, here."

She looked at the credits then back up at him.

"Million."

"Excuse me?"

"I need 80 million."

"WHAT THE f**k HOW COULD YOU GO THAT FAR INTO DEBT?!!?!"

"Bad luck at a casino?"

Gaed stared at her and started walking out. Then he stopped.

"You know... You could do underground matches for cash...."

"Get me in."

Gaed walked out. Raze looked at the door, thinking about all she was working for now, her daughter, and possibly her life. She opened up a drawer to get a pen and sure enough there was a picture of her daughter left in there by someone. She turned it over and found a piece of paper on the back.

<C:/My Computer/My Documents/Raze/Videos/Daughter.MP4>

She followed the address and opened up the video. Sure enough it was her daughter on the swing, smiling. Then the screen turned red.

"12 days or she dies"

She stared as the screen started showing pictures of boys with instestines in their mouths from their own stomaches, girls whos arms and legs had all been broken and just left in a room to squirm until they died, and even infants who had been beaten to death by some hard object.

She was in horror.

"Not my daughter..."

She turned on the intercom.

"Gaed when can we start fighting underground?"

"Tonight. First match is going to be interesting."

"Why's that?"

"It's another blader."

"Enter Bio, pull out of R- league they cost too much."

"We can't"

"Why R-league will get suspicious of AC activity outside of a league and smash it."

"Then cancel our fight. We do't wanna pay taxes and crap to them."

"Done."

"How much can we get for winning tonight?"

"5 or 6 million if the crowd is huge and full of rich people."

"What about a normal one?"

"Closer to 10."

"How do theymake so much?"

"Anything goes."

"So?"

"If bio is intact after tonight, be thankful."

"What the f**k?"

"Blades are used by all the AC's, as they are programmed customly with lots of dedication, like Lyz, and when an AC gets severed, they don't call a match."

"Sounds like fun."

"Our assembly team is gonna hate you."

"Good."


They both showed up at the underground's complex, an hour outside of town, and underground (literally). They walked in and you could see the separation in the crowds. The betters in suits, and the architects and their teams in street clothes.

Raze went into the architect box as she was the opening match.

A man waited for her in there.
She looked at him, horrified at what she had seen, and instantly looked down at her monitor, too scared to talk.

"Something wrong Raze?"

She stared at her monitor not wanting to say a word to the man.

"Go ahead and tell me Raze."

......



Match Starts in 3


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GO!!!!!!!

The bets were made and the AC's were off.

Teh blader AC, Unknown, went off using traditional blader tactics, nowhere near the caliber of Lyz's unique approach.

Bio watched it run around, keeping it's range as Uknown just had a blade, no gunns or parry.

Bio then started approaching it.

Raze realized her stupidity in putting a blader AI in a gunner.

Bio was rushing straight at Unknown. Unknown winded up for a hit, when Bio Unloaded a grenade, and a laser cannon shot right into the blade destroying it.

Raze stared at the screen, in pure shock ofwhat had happened.

Unknown shut down and too the beating from Bio's EO and died, Bio acting like the laziest he could have been and standing there shooting it.

A new man came in the room.

"Raze! How are you?"

"I'...... I'....... I'm fine...."

"Good, your AC came out without a single scratch, want to do another match tongiht?"

"Can I get a reload?"

"I'll dop it, even on the house, no one saw that coming!"

"Thanks."

She followed the new man out, too afraid to look at her opposing architect. They went to a hanger when Bio was already getting a full reload.

"How much did we win?"

"Well Unknown is one of the top competitor's here, and they always liek to test the fresh meat. They're known for pulling wins right out of their ass."

"So how much did we win?"

"Well you had a pretty even bet put out, and people seem to be picky with their money tonight, so...."

"Well?"

"Roughly 4 million."

"Holy crap...."

"Yeah, you're going to be in the next match, versus an AC known as Widower, Has no pilot though, he just left the AC here and we sponsor it because we know it wins."

"Ok."

"Trust me the AC is incredible, unfortunately the guy went off in the R-leauge to do other stuff. Hell the guy RUNS a freaking league so he's a bit hard to handle."

"Well I'm sorry."

"For what?"

"You're repair bill."

Raze walked out.






Chapter 10: A second fight, A second enemy





Extra suspense!!!! and MORE AC battles coming!!!

Widower is in the next one!

Find out who the opposing mystery architecht is in the next one!


[glow=red,2,300]NEW RULE ABOUT MY FANFIC!!!

I DONT THINK PEOPLE ARE READING IT THAT MUCH SO TO GET AN UPDATE I WANT 5 POSTS OF ANYTHING (that you read it, feedback, anything) TO GET AN UPDATE![/glow]


(P.S. Shear I said widower would make an appearance, didn't think you thought I would plan this far ahead did ya?)

[Shark]

Haha, that's great. I see that more of the renowned humor has returned. I liked this conversation:

"80 -"

"Pfft I have 80 credits in my wallet, here."

She looked at the credits then back up at him.

"Million."

"Excuse me?"

"I need 80 million."

"WHAT THE f**k HOW COULD YOU GO THAT FAR INTO DEBT?!!?!"

"Bad luck at a casino?"

Your fic is probably the funniest here, Silence... you should come in more often (if/when you can).

[Silence]

4 posts til an update

[AtrumCustodis]

And here is reply #2.

This is great.

But I want more Cursing!!!

I want to see the Auto-Corrections

"HOW THE f**k DO i GET OUT OF THIS nuts? I HAVE NO f**kING CLUE WHAT TO DO."

[Shark]

Hey O-G... you seem to be a pretty avid reader of fanfics. Get in here and comment .

[Silence]

3 more til update....

[Shark]

Alright, I hope this post counts.

We need Silence back in here .